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Revision of Essay Drafts


Good morning everyone. In today's lecture, I'm going to talk about how to revise essay drafts and give you some tips as well. The initial revision should, of course, focus on the essay as a whole.

You'd ask yourself: do I reach my writing objective? Does my essay directly answer the question? Is my main idea clear? In order to answer these questions, what you need to do first is to revise for content. The typical rough draft may have too little and too much content all at the same time. It will have touched the surface of some portions of the essay without providing adequate explanation or convincing detail. At the same time, it may have discussed things that do not contribute significantly to your major points.
So, what is a good essay then? A good essay eliminates irrelevant material while includes all the information necessary to your main point. Your reader needs sufficient evidence to accept what you are saying. So, you have to make sure you have adequately developed and supported your main idea. Content that is unrelated to the main idea should be eliminated.
Then, what is the second step in revision? That is revise for organization. A well-organized essay will group similar ideas together and put them in the proper order. If you find it easy to produce an outline from your draft, this means that there is a clear logic to the flow of the content. And you can be reasonably certain that you have a well-ordered essay; otherwise, reorder your content.

The third step you are advised to take is to revise for length. Is your essay approximately the right length? If it is substantially longer than the stated limit, you have to consider reducing the supporting material. But even if there's no stated limit, or you are allowed to write as long as you like, please adhere to a self-imposed limit.

And unless addressing a topic that needs lengthy explanation, stick to it. The steps I have mentioned so far actually refer to revision of an essay as a whole. The next step is to revise for components of the essay including the paragraphs, sentences, and individual words. You may ask: how am I going to revise paragraphs? Well, I'd say a paragraph is not arbitrarily formed. It should revolve around an idea, a theme. Let me tell you one way to revise paragraphs: isolate a paragraph at a time, and make sure it runs smoothly and is not merely a bunch of unrelated statements put together. As for revision of sentences and words, most essay writers pile on one long sentence after another.
Well, I'd suggest you avoid this by breaking up some of the longer sentences to provide variety. Use short sentences to make important points, and long sentences to explain complex ideas. Also try to use a variety of sentence structures to maintain reader interest. Eliminate sentences that sound awkward when read aloud. For diction, a very important tip is to eliminate imprecise or wordy language. For example, use although instead of despite the fact that; try to add vigor to your writing by removing cliches, and use fresh and interesting descriptions. Try to write as much as possible with nouns and verbs than primarily with adjectives that slow the pace and reduce impact. Similarly, right in the active, not the passive voice.
我建議你通過分解一些長句使句式變得多樣化,從而避免這種情況。用短句來強調重點,用長句來解釋複雜的想法。也要嘗試使用各種句子結構來保持讀者的興趣。刪去大聲朗讀時聽起來很彆扭的句子。對於措辭來説,一個非常重要的建議是刪除不精確或冗長的語言。例如,使用“although”而不是“despite the fact that”;嘗試通過刪除陳詞濫調來增加寫作的活力,並使用新鮮有趣的描述。儘量使用名詞和動詞,而不是主要用形容詞來寫作,這些形容詞會減慢文章的推進速度,削弱文章的效果。同樣地,要儘量使用主動語態,而不是被動語態。
Now let me just repeat what I have said today. Revision is important. When you revise your draft as a whole, pay attention to content, organization and length. But don't forget to revise your essay in detail. Revision of sentences and words can also make the essay more interesting to readers.

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irrelevant [i'relivənt]


adj. 不恰當的,無關係的,不相干的

revolve [ri'vɔlv]


v. 旋轉,考慮,循環

evidence ['evidəns]


n. 根據,證據
v. 證實,證明

outline ['əutlain]


n. 輪廓,大綱
vt. 概述,畫出輪廓

adhere [əd'hiə]


vi. 堅守於,對 ... 忠貞,緊抓着,遵守

revise [ri'vaiz]


n. 校訂,修正,再校稿
v. 校訂,修正,校

smoothly [smu:ðli]


adv. 平滑地,流暢地

theme [θi:m]


n. 題目,主題

variety [və'raiəti]


n. 多樣,種類,雜耍

lengthy ['leŋθi]


adj. 冗長的,漫長的